For my Wiki review I chose a paper by Bálint Adám, Dominik Kovács, Benedek Matveev, Luca Mizzi and Carlos Rodriguez on The Chinese Social Credit System.
I think the topic chosen is really interesting, hence why I chose this article to review, and important at the same time. As the Chinese government is really invading people's privacy, at least in my opinion, by tracking its citizens and companies. It's important to know about the problem so we could avoid this also happening in the western world.
All in all, I think the most important aspects of the topic got covered, at least what I was hoping to learn from it while reading the article, and it was presented in a good manner so it was interesting to read.
The structure of the article was good, it was organized in a logical way and was divided into subcategories, although they could have been tied a bit better.
The viewpoint or angle of the article was for the most part pretty neutral as it should be. Maybe it was a bit to the opposing side to the Chinese government at some points, but then again it's hard to write neutrally about such a topic where pretty much any sane person could agree that peoples' lives are being directly manipulated by the government.
I think the chosen sources were pretty okay, they even used some book sources which was positively surprising. One thing that definitely should have been implemented is references for the sources. They only had all of the sources listed at the end of the article but didn't really show where they used specific sources. Also, I would have added timestamps when the sources were accessed as we know that they might become unavailable in the future and we can't access the links anymore. But in general, they had plenty of different sources and not only online ones, so I think they did well, just the formatting could have been better.
As for the language and form, it was mostly good. It did have some grammar/structure mistakes in some places, including wrong capitalization (ie at the start of a sentence or the title of a show) and shortened form which in general should be avoided in formal writings.
All in all, I enjoyed the read, and thank you to the authors for choosing an important topic to talk about! :)
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Link to their article: https://wiki.itcollege.ee/index.php/The_Chinese_Social_Credit_System#Comparing_both_realities_-_China_and_Usa_monitoring
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